Jeremy is in need of a roommate, and after he is told no from a friend he is given the number of Justin, a complete stranger. Excited, Jeremy calls the number and the two decide that they are going to meet the next day to get to know each other. Justin doesn't get that and moves in along with his cat Mary Jane. Once Justin moves in Jeremy realizes that the two roommates are the complete polar opposite, Jeremy likes to be neat, tidy and punctual. While Justin is lazy, unkempt and a mess. On the first day Mary Jane goes missing, once she is found Justin irrationally blames Jeremy. He now realizes that allowing this stranger to live with him might be a problem. The next day the smoke settles and Justin apologizes to Jeremy, he explains why the cat matters so much to him. Jeremy starts to believe that he might be able to live with this random guy, but moments later that changes when Mary Jane goes “missing” again. The two start to look for the cat once again, and once they can’t find her the two begin to yell back and forth. Jeremy finally puts his foot down and tell Justin that he needs to leave. Like the last time Mary Jane is found in a incriminating position which causes the two fight, then Justin decided to leave. The next day Jeremy comes home to find that Justin had left early. Relieved Jeremy soon finds out why Mary Jane went missing and why Justin decided to move in the day they meet. In the span of three days Jeremy was able to see what happens when you show too much hospitality to someone you just met. This story has things that everyone can love, conflict, drama and cats.
Ideal Cast
Ideal Cast
Jeremy - Thomas Middleditch
Justin - T.J Miller
Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/0B1xcuWK92hAYMzVlTDJUanRmUUU/view?usp=sharing
You did a great job completing your intention of keeping the amount of characters in your screenplay to a minimum. It's basically just Justin, Jeremy, MOM like once, and the new roommate for 2 lines which makes all the dialogue important and not fluff.
ReplyDeleteThis was a comical screen play that captures the two main characters personalities very well.
ReplyDeleteI liked how your dialogue was very realistic, you did not sugar coat any conversation: this is how 2 boys would talk to eachother. This was also really funny and I liked the minimal characters.
ReplyDeleteThe dialogue was very realistic for people at that age and for the type of people they are.
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ReplyDeleteI liked how this script was very relatable and realistic. Often you hear horror stories of people trying to find roommates so this was a good plot line trying to capture that struggle. You also did a really good job of developing the characters personalities throughout their dialogue and actions.
ReplyDeleteI like how you made very realistic dialogue that helped to establish the characters. You used dialogue that reflects how normal people talk so the text became more immersive.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you used simple dialogue in order to portray how normal people speak, and how you have a small cast in order to keep it pure and streamline
ReplyDeleteYou did a good job with keeping your characters to a minimum within the screenplay. With having a minimum amount of characters, every piece of dialogue is important.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you kept your screenplay interesting and comical even with the limited amount of characters. Good job!
ReplyDeleteYour screenplay showed progression even with the little change in scenery and few character. The voices of the character were very personal and had a distinct feel.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed this screenplay. Even with so few characters, the dialogue was really realistic. Overall, this screenplay was realistic but still comical. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThis was really funny! Perhaps the best aspect was the dialogue and how it developed the character's personalities. Great job accomplishing all the intensions!
ReplyDeleteThis screenplay was a unique one, but a great one. The story only had a few characters but it made the story great. The screenplay was even comical. Great Job
ReplyDeleteI liked how the dialog was written reflecting how people speak. Thought the story was funny and did a good job at keeping the humor going with limited characters. Thought you accomplished your intentions.
ReplyDeletegood job meeting your intentions! it was very fun and funny to read through.
ReplyDeleteThe dialogue really helped to establish the personalities of Jeremy and Justin. It was really relatable also with college around the corner it was funny.
ReplyDeleteAlthough you set my expectations low, I was really impressed. I cracked up. I could picture it all happening. Good Job on your intentions too.
ReplyDeleteThis was so funny and I love the plot line. It reminds me a little bit of the Odd Couple. All your intentions were definitely met.
ReplyDeleteI liked your detailed action blocks. It helps clarify exactly what is going on.
ReplyDeleteThis is so funny and realistic. I could almost see it playing out on a screen.
ReplyDeleteLoved the detail in the screenplay. Such a funny screenplay. Great job with your intentions.
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