The Unforgettable Journey is a story about the famous basketball player Jason Williams, aka White Chocolate. Jason Williams is known for his crazy dribble moves and his flashy passes, but Jason wasn't always the great player that he is known as. Jason was also not the in the same shape that he was when he was in the NBA. The Unforgettable Journey tells the story about Jason from 5th grade to 9th grade where Jason first starts to play basketball and why he kept playing it all the way through the NBA. This story also shows the hardships that Jason went through during his childhood that really shaped him into the person and player that he is today.
The film first starts out as we see Jason watching the NBA finals with his father. This is the first time where we see Jason's love for the game, while we also see that Jason ins't in the best shape to play basketball. We also see that Jason is not in the best shape after his eating habits. The morning after Jason was watching the game he came down and ate 3 donuts. Jason also didn't exercise very much either. He is shown in his room playing video games all day. Terry Williams, Jason's father, gets mad at Jason and decides to force Jason to go down to Milburn Park. This is where we see Jason play basketball for the first time, but Jason isn't doing that great. He didn't know how to do anything basketball wise. This is where we see that Jason was going to have a long hard journey on his way to greatness.
We see Jason go through a lot of hardships over the course of the movie. He has family problems and even problems of his own. Jason always finds a way to get through all of these hardships and even has the help of others such as Coach Perez. At the end of his childhood things are looking bright for Jason as he sees all of his childhood work pay off.
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Ideal Cast
Jason Williams - Ridley Scott
Terry WIlliams - Tim McGraw
Delana Williams - Sandra Bullock
Coach Perez - Mike Brown
Zach Smith - Kyle Korver
Mike did a good job with accomplishing all his intentions. He did a good job with showing hard work pays off with Jason having to put in good work to get better.
ReplyDeleteMike did a really good job at showing the relationship between son and father. He also showed Jason's journey in a really good and relatable way. He did a great job and accomplished all of intentions!
ReplyDeleteYou did a great job accomplishing your intentions with this screenplay. You especially did a good job showing Jason's hardships and then showing his hard work to overcome them.
ReplyDeleteThis showed the importance of hard work and I think Mike did a good job of making the plot relatable. All the intensions were hit.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you showed the different characters with different personalities. Though you met all your intentions and was a well writing.
ReplyDeletei really liked how you made the characters have to work hard in order to overcome his obstacle. you did a great job accomplishing all your intentions.
ReplyDeleteMike did a great job of writing a high school sports screenplay like Connor did. All of his intentions were met.
ReplyDeleteSimilar to Connor's screenplay, I love the relatable high school setting and the characters personalities. This screenplay was focused on the importance of hard work and was able to accomplish all of it's intentions.
ReplyDeleteI really liked your theme of developing a relationship between a coach and player. This is very relatable to many high school students. You met all your intentions, especially how you showed the importance of hard work.
ReplyDeleteI really liked how you made Jason face difficulty and then through hard work, prevail. This screenplay appeals to me because i also wrote a sports screenplay. Great job.
ReplyDeleteI think you really accomplished your third intention of the importance of a relationship between Coach Perez and a Jason. Anyone who plays sports or part of a team can relate to a strong relationship between their coach.
ReplyDeleteThis is clearly aimed towards high school students and being that it was written by one it was super relate able. The importance of a relationship between a coach and a player was clearly established.
ReplyDeleteAll your intentions were met. This story is super relatable for many high schoolers so it was really engaging.
ReplyDeleteI liked how there were a lot of action blocks. I feel as though I was able to better visualize everything that was happening.
ReplyDeleteI like the way your story is relatable to a typical high school setting, it made the audience really understand the hardships that Jason faced.
ReplyDeleteAlthough I am not an athlete, i feel that i now understand the coach - athlete relationship well.
ReplyDeleteI like how you used a real basketball player and his story to meet your intentions. A great story of perseverance and hard work despite hardships of life and career.
ReplyDeleteYour screenplay was very relatable to high schoolers.Great job with your intentions.
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