The Setback by Brooke Rossiter
Have you ever wanted something so bad that you would do anything to achieve it? Sarah's dream is to play soccer at Florida State University. She is trying to get recruited by colleges for soccer but she breaks a bone in her foot two months before an important showcase. She needs to play her best at this showcase, and doesn’t know if she will be able to overcome this injury in time. She will attempt to solve this conflict by doing everything possible to achieve a quick recovery and by working hard to get back in shape before this showcase. Sarah comes across many obstacles along the way, like the biggest party of the year happening the weekend she is supposed to be training. Will she make the right decision and stay home? Her friends aren't very encouraging and often times will try to convince Sarah to stop training for soccer. Sarah has to overcome these conflicts in order to make sure she is ready to play at the college level. She has her mom and coach to keep her on track, but with the high school social life surrounding her, Sarah has to stay strong. Will she be ready?
Ideal Cast:
Sarah: Amanda Bynes
Tony: Channing Tatum
Scott: Justin Pentice
Coach Smith: Dwayne Johnson
Jamie: Rachel McAdams
Emma: Amanda Seyfried
Mom: Jamie Lee Curtis
FSU Coach: Mark Harmon
link: https://drive.google.com/a/sparta.org/file/d/0ByoiM5uXTpm6UWtGRHI2dEFnVlE/view?usp=sharing
You did a great job with your second intention. I liked how the audience could experience the suspenseful tone with the difficulty of the girl getting recruited.
ReplyDeleteYou did a great job accomplishing your first intention to show the girls drive and motivation. The audience could tell how hard Sarah was working and training.
ReplyDeleteI liked this screenplay, it sounds a lot like a High school sports movie like Connors volleyball screenplay. All of her intentions were met.
ReplyDeleteThis screenplay made me think of Connors but this was different and in a good way. The drive and motivation made me think of high school sports and the dedication it takes. This was awesome.
ReplyDeleteGood job Brooke! You did such a good job accomplishing your intensions and I found this really easy to relate to because of the high school demographic.
ReplyDeleteYour screen play was well written and I liked how you started to show the determination of the main character in the beginning and helped to meet all the intentions.
ReplyDeleteyou did a good job completing all your intentions. i really like your topic and i think your characters determination was really awesome.
ReplyDeleteI loved how this was based in a high school setting and appealing to teenage audiences. It was relateable and entertaining. Your intentions were met, good job.
ReplyDeleteI really like the suspense you created and not just gave it away.The breakdowns that Sarah has is relatable with college applications in the beginning of the year. I always looked to what happened on the next page.
ReplyDeleteI like how the topic was so important to you as you played soccer for all of your life. I also love how the audience was able to connect with the main character by experiencing her difficulties (her getting recruited) with her.
ReplyDeleteI love how lots of us (the audience) can relate to what you wrote about in this (how hard work and motivation leads to success). You created a suspenseful tone which made this screenplay a great page turner! Awesome job!
ReplyDeleteOne intention that you really accomplished was showing the main character's drive to be recruited and the audience could definitely tell. Great job writing this screenplay.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you showed all the challenges that stood in her way to getting recruited, like her friends going to a party without her. This accomplishes your 2nd intention well.
ReplyDeleteI love the suspenseful tone because it kept me really engaged in the story. You met all of your intentions
ReplyDeleteI felt as though I was really able to connect to Sarah. I liked the interactions between her and the coach. The conflict with her getting recruited can probably be described as "suspenseful".
ReplyDeleteThe main characters drive was displayed well when she doesn't give up.
ReplyDeletethe intentions were met, and this screenplay takes the typical teen movie and adds a unique touch to it without loosing the teen movie charm.
ReplyDeleteI think your intentions were met especially your first one. I feel that Sarah had a very strong motivation as well as showing her drive to further her character depth.
ReplyDeleteVery well written. Your plot really flowed well. Great job with your intentions.
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