Tim and Jeff were headed on vacation to visit their grandma and have a good time in Las Vegas. When they were approached by a guy with an offer to carry his mysterious package through airport security. They were offered $2,000 and were very skeptical but they accepted knowing it could be very dangerous for them if they get caught. They endured many sketchy moments throughout their journey through the airport. This journey includes traveling past police and police dogs. Working their way through security and maybe getting caught. Will the get caught or will they make it to the gate with an extra $2,000 for their trip. How will they react when they find out what they were carrying? Come watch the movie if you’re into thrillers or want to find out what happens to Tim and Jeff and if they ever find out what’s in the box.
Ideal Cast
Tim- Michael Cera
Jeff- Dave Franco
Guy- Steve Buscemi
TSA Security Guy- Dwayne Johnson
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I thought that the characters you had fit the roles of bad-a** main characters in an action movie. I thought there were a few cliche lines like "see you on the other side" but that added to the effect of being an action film.
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ReplyDeleteI like how you made the two main characters Tim and Jeff polar opposites of each other. This was a good choice for this piece because it offered each scene some mild conflict which keeps the audience entertained.
ReplyDeleteI liked how the main characters had different personalities and made it entreating on how each of them dealt with the blue bag. You accomplished your first goal of having the characters be completely different.
ReplyDeleteYou accomplished one of your intentions really well by having the two main characters have opposite personalities. Having two different personalities was a good idea since each scene keeps the audience entertained and does not lose interest.
ReplyDeleteYou really accomplished the first intention through dialogue. The main character's opposite characterization enhanced the overall plot.
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ReplyDeleteThe idea of Tim and Jeff was an awesome idea. Having these two as polar opposites created a unique story. Good job
ReplyDeleteYou definitely accomplished your first intention to create two opposite characters. The continuous debate between Tim and Jeff made great dialogue.
ReplyDeleteYou're first intention was accomplished by the way the characters spoke to each other. The opposite personalities kept the story funny.
ReplyDeleteThe opposite personalities of the characters made this a very entertaining story as well as made you able to accomplish your goal of having opposite characters.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you made the personalities of the characters juxtaposed to one another, you really accomplished your first goal! Tim and Jeff's dialogue made the story really funny!
ReplyDeleteYou accomplished your first goal really well by having the main characters have different personalities. It made the screenplay a lot more interesting than if Tim and Jeff were the same.
ReplyDeleteThe way you showed the opposite personalities of the characters through the way you made them speak was very good. It made the story very interesting to read.
ReplyDeleteI like how you had two completely different main characters in order to keep the conflict and dialogue interesting. Good job in completing that narrative intention!
ReplyDeleteI like how ironic the whole story is. Your characters were very different which added to the irony, in addition the ending had a funny twist.
ReplyDeleteYou showed a good contrast between the two main characters by developing the one brother as the more logical and cautious one and the other as the riskier, more adventurous one. I also thought you did a good job accomplishing your third intention because you show by the characters' struggle by showing rather than telling what was going on in their heads.
ReplyDeleteThis screenplay had some Hangover vibes which I liked a lot, but that's probably because it takes place in Vegas. All of his intentions were met above and beyond.
ReplyDeleteThe way the characters played off of each other was amazing, it kept the dialogue funny and engaging. Their reactions to the TSA while they were carrying the picture were also funny and realistic.
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ReplyDeleteThis screenplay was humorous and engaging without "trying too hard" to be funny.
ReplyDeleteThe two things that really mad the screenplay funny was the fact that the characters were so different as well as the fact that they come to the worst possible conclusions. I Enjoyed it fun read
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