The Union, a massive empire which controlled half of the world, has collapsed. In it's wake, a world-eating swarm, simply known as the Corruption, has destroyed almost everything that was once a part of the empire.
Enter Karie, a sniper which was once a part of the Union, but since it’s collapse has gone rogue. She remembers nothing about the old world, or who she was before. All she knows now is that she’s extremely sick. Willing to go through anything to get a cure, she enters an old Union facility, which she would go on to discover was an old research lab.
She enters the lab with an AI named Oliver inside her helmet, just barely escaping death. She finds that the lab still has power, but is on lockdown from back when the collapse occurred. She goes on to explore the facility, finding various other people and dangers still dormant from within the facility.
In many ways, this screenplay takes inspiration from several other sci-fi franchises, while still taking care to maintain it’s own themes.
Ideal cast:
Karie - Scarlett Johansson
Oliver - Nolan North
Dot - Jen Taylor
Jacques Steel - Kevin Spacey
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Intentions:
Intentions:
- Create mystery and anxiety through the presence and utilization of silence.
- Use witty banter to show progression in relationships between characters.
- To show the moral ambiguity of the main character and her intentions through her selfish actions and mindset.
Andrew did a really good job incorporating silence into his screenplay. It added a mysterious tone to the story.
ReplyDeleteAndrew did a good job of using dialogue to create a witty banter. This helped build characterization and create dynamic characters.
ReplyDeleteThe first intention was awesome and in some way I think this silence also developed some relationships as well. It went along great with your plot.
ReplyDeleteThe silence went well with the play and it flowed nicely. The silence also showed a different relationship between the main characters and is good.
ReplyDeleteYou accomplished the goal of creating mysterious and anxious tone like you planned by having silent moments and having random things happen like dead bodies falling and so on.
ReplyDeleteHe did a great job with his first intention with creating silence. The silence went very well within the story and created relationships within it.
ReplyDeleteYou did a great job making a witty tone as well as a mysterious tone through the dialogue. The silence helped create this tone effectively.
ReplyDeleteYou did a very good job showing banter between characters. The one that showed it the most was Karie and I can relate to her
ReplyDeleteYou did a great job creating a mysterious tone by not giving the audience an inside look at what's going on and what's going to happen. The audience has the viewpoint of the characters which makes it mysterious.
ReplyDeletei think you used silence in a great way to increase the mysteriousness and suspense of your play. great job!
ReplyDeleteI thought that Oliver's dialogue and side comments with Karie at the beginning were good for establishing the relationship between the two. I also thought that the concept of this story was really cool and interesting. I was able to imagine the story happening in my head as I read it.
ReplyDeleteIt was very descriptive and you could picture what all of the characters were doing and what was going on. It was really interesting to read and how Oliver and Karie stayed together through all of her pain.
ReplyDeleteI like the banter between the two main characters. It was a well thought out and executed intention, because it adds a lot of depth to the relationship that they share.
ReplyDeleteI really liked the dialogue among the characters, it was very witty and flowed easily. Additionally, the intention regarding tone was met. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThe two main characters and their relationship made the story. The action portions made me actually picture what happened in the story.
ReplyDeleteI like this screenplay because of the mystery and the characters relationship to each other. The narrative intention of creating mystery was successful through the silence and keeping the audience's viewpoint the same as the main character's.
ReplyDeleteAndrew was able to keep his screenplay light and funny but also serious and suspenseful. All of his intentions were met.
ReplyDeleteThe screenplay plot is really cool, especially because the kind of dystopian feel is so popular among audiences right now. The relationship you develop between characters is very clear in your dialogue, you did a good job with witty tone.
ReplyDeleteThe screenplay was very different and incorporated a good sense of suspense by utilizing silence very well. The intentions were met very effectively.
ReplyDeleteUnlike most of the popular dystopian fiction, this storyline is less reliant on action and more reliant on the characters present. The universe is very well developed, and it is clear that a lot of time was invested in this. This screenplay and concept is amazing, and were it a real movie, I would totally pay to see it.
ReplyDeleteWell written, Andrew! I liked how you resorted to the never-failing tactic of suspense and I liked your use of silence to develop it. Also, you did a good job in achieving your second tactic. You characterized in a clever manner through the characters' alteration of tone depending on who they're talking with.
ReplyDeleteLove the cast especially Nolan north i used a voice actor as well. I did enjoy your story. it was very character based. the characters made the story. i like the idea behind it A+
ReplyDeleteYou did a great job creating a mysterious tone. You did a great job accomplishing all of your intentions. Your plot flowed well with mystery.
ReplyDeleteI like this screenplay because of the mystery and the characters relationship to each other.
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